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Patience

April 7th 2009 15:50


It’s the waning fractured
Thought of possibility
That keeps the air flowing
When your life bobs
Over and under the
Water.

The longer you take
To move the harder
It gets to consider it.
You go cold threading
Water for someone else
‘til you have no
Space for yourself.

Or nothing but space
In a vast expanse of
Sea. Nothing you
Can reach though you
Always knew it was
There.

The water drags you
Down a little more
Everyday. Swallows
Up the part of you
That pulled away.
The part of you that

Really wanted to be
Dry though you plunged
In head first.

The part if you that
Bore what you thought
Would be a start.
A floating start
To journeys end to
Somewhere.

Your mind begins to
Numb and fill blankly
With the gurgles of
The sea. The continuous
Echo of all you hear
Around you, but no
Words of your own.

It seeps ‘til you are
Beyond resistance.
Until you have
Become just another.



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Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

April 7th 2009 15:58
Finally.

Someone who knows what cadence is.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

April 7th 2009 16:00
Now this is a great poem.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

April 7th 2009 16:01
Just a small tip though. Get rid of the capitals at the start of each line.

Comment by Rachael Murphy

April 7th 2009 16:03
To be honest that was laziness because when you go onto the next line the wordprocessor automatically gives you a acapital and I just didn't change it. Thank you though for your kind words about my poetry.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

April 7th 2009 16:13
Just go into your tools menu and turn off the "Capitalize each line" function. You can do it in a lazy manner. I've done it.

Well, I like your poetry. I honestly don't like much poetry but I like yours.

I reminds me of being back at writing college and reading Nadine's poetry. She wrote great poetry. I miss Nadine a bit. We used to feed off each other (in a poetry sense).

One day I'll write some poetry for Teresa. But she keeps sleeping at night and all I do is sit around waiting for her to wake up so we can talk to each other. And then I forget to write poetry for her, because I enjoy her company too much to write.

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