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"The saints sit up in heaven twiddling their thumbs because so few people pray to them any more." - St Madeleine Sophie Barat

Darkness

September 7th 2008 02:06
darkness


Take me to the place where darkness reigns
it’s the only place where I can truly see

my life is littered with shadows
they seem to follow me
swallow me

swallow me

in the darkness of your mind
the darkness of your past

engulf me in a thousand lost nights
of your shattered dreams

tell me all your dirty secrets
show me all your stains
wrap me in the soiled clothing of your past
hidden like the only dress you ever owned
the one worn inside-out and back-to-front

strip me of this long black coat
woven from years of silence
and the sound of drinking alone
this coat that strangles me
cloaks my voice
and chokes my tongue

it’s nothing but a dark bottle
holding everything inside

set me free in the night time
of your darkest desires

our wardrobes both could tell some lurid stories
and our naked bodies, even more
but let’s open the doors of our minds
read what’s underneath this skin of ours

I want to see the world through your bruised eyes
and tell you why my bleeding face
once blinded me

let’s flip the switch on the brighter parts of life
sunshine, flowers and childhood innocence long gone
they can’t teach me a thing
and I don’t want to learn
I want to study the night sky

unleash the thunder rumbling in your troubled heart
I’ll drench you in the storm clouds of my mind
let’s wash ourselves down each others darkened streams

tonight would be the perfect night
for the sky is as black as our souls
the moon and stars have hand-clouds over their eyes
and over their ears

it will stop us dreaming of
what never was
what can never be

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Comment by Kleonaptra

September 7th 2008 06:07
Oh David.

Its magnificent. Its like.....Everything Ive ever tried to say, and the reasons behind saying it...Why should I ever try for imagery again, when you got it? You said what I have been trying so hard to say.

And right now, its hitting me hard.....If its an invitation, I can deafen you with my secrets....

Comment by Damo

September 7th 2008 08:35
David

That is very dark.

I hope that it is a result of skill more than actual mood.
Because the skill is there , but the mood is disturbing.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 7th 2008 11:05
Kleo,

You always come up with something better than anything I write:

I can deafen you with my secrets....

I wish I'd written that.

In one line you've written a better poem than everything above.

I still thank you for your compliments, but that one line? It's actually better than my entire poem. And anyone who knows poetry would say the same.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 7th 2008 11:10
Damo,

The real skill lies in finding out where you actually live and stalking you.

Shit, mate, I thought you knew me well enough by now to know everything I write is pure fantasy. Shit I've written stuff about having sex with a woman. Come on. Eveyone on Orble knows that's pure fantasy.

I will not be stalking you, okay?

But one more comment like that?

Na, nice to see you comment man. For a guy who's not into poetry?

I'll try to get to your posts soon ... these adult sex sites are crippling me. They have webcam.

One day? I'll write something serious on Orble. Seriously, I wlll.


Comment by Damo

September 7th 2008 11:21
David

I was drinking a cup of tea when I read the line about stalking. Now I tea coming out my nose. Thanks for making me snort with laughter at the wrong time.

Okay you learned my dirty secret. I do not hate poetry. I just hate crap poetry.

Nice to you again too.
Webcam huh? Does it pay well?

I look forward to your writing something serious for Orble. Not that we do not have an abundant supply of such people but there is always room for one more.



Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 7th 2008 12:22
Damo,

Didn't mean to make you snort tea.

Have you thought about seeking counselling or going into a rehab centre?

I have to go man. I'm totally wasted tonight. What's new?

Will hopefully catch up with you on your blog tomorrow.

Comment by Damo

September 7th 2008 12:49
Tomorrow?

I will try to write something in between the first of my twelves steps for my tea snorting addiction and registering to vote in the upcoming US elections.

Comment by Kleonaptra

September 7th 2008 23:23
David darling, you flatter me. And Im not worth it.

Snorting tea. Now theres a new one. I thought you were supposed to smoke it.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 8th 2008 06:50
Damo,

The first step is to admit you snort tea.

The seconds step is to avoid places that sell tea.

As for the other ten steps? I'll tell you when I sober up.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 8th 2008 06:52
Kleo,

Self-deprecating humour is alright in small doses.

That's enough philosophy. We all should admit we need a good root.

Comment by Damo

September 8th 2008 07:52
I am only a social tea snorter.
Honest.
I can quit at any time.

Comment by JohnDoe

September 16th 2008 10:12
Great poem David,

Good to find you in your usual spirits..you know Jack Daniels (JD), Glenfiddich and Stoli..

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 16th 2008 22:19
7,

Thanks.

I actually wrote is as song lyrics for a muso mate in Perth. He's into heavy metal bands like Metallica, but also does acoustic with his drummer mate. He's playing around with the lyrics a bit, and composing the music at the moment. He saidhe just wanted the sound to be raw, so I'll be interested to hear what he comes up with. As much as I love writing poetry I'd much prefer to write lyrics [well they're one and the same almost. I've always considered songwriters the modern poets, anyway]. And I think there'd be a little more money in a song than a poetry book.

Comment by Anonymous

September 17th 2008 02:50
Beautiful writing, whatever the actual mood or intent when it was written.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 17th 2008 16:09
Thanks Anon,

It's always nice to get some positive feedback, and know that people get some pleasure out of what I write.

Comment by Anonymous

September 18th 2008 01:11
Welcome.

Comment by Lady Henrietta Muddling

September 19th 2008 00:18
Suzanne,

It's the best part of the post.

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