A rose by any other name, would smell just as sweet
July 14th 2007 22:15
Please people i really need feedback for this one, im planing on sending it to this girl named Rose.
A rose by any other name, would smell just as sweet.
Because nectar from that precious flower would leave you wanting more.
Because just the feeling is almost to much to contain.
Words whispered through seductive lips.
Things seen through fixated eyes.
So much more than a sexual feeling.
So much more than that tingle I get when I see you.
Because I speak of love
Total devotion to someone like you
Not even needing physical contact
Just you being there fulfils me
The need pulling away at my heart
Just wanting to see you
Talk to you
Know how you’re doing
Because the way I think of you
I may never be able to express
But I will try on this canvas
Because I speak of love
A rose by any other name, would smell just as sweet.
Because nectar from that precious flower would leave you wanting more.
Because just the feeling is almost to much to contain.
Words whispered through seductive lips.
Things seen through fixated eyes.
So much more than a sexual feeling.
So much more than that tingle I get when I see you.
Because I speak of love
Total devotion to someone like you
Not even needing physical contact
The need pulling away at my heart
Just wanting to see you
Talk to you
Know how you’re doing
Because the way I think of you
I may never be able to express
But I will try on this canvas
Because I speak of love
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Comment by Lily
Ars Poetica
I would never ask someone who has written a poem from their heart, to change a single word. My only advice would be to form the first verse as follows; (one typo corrected)
A rose by any other name
would smell just as sweet.
Because nectar from that precious flower
would leave you wanting more.
Because just the feeling
is almost too much to contain.
Words whispered through seductive lips.
Things seen through fixated eyes.
So much more than a sexual feeling.
So much more than that tinge I get
when I see you.
~Lily
Comment by David
would never smell as sweet
as you.
Your nectar always leaves me wanting more.
Lily’s mouth is just an open trumpet
with a strumpet’s furry tongue to boot.
Daisy’s petals limply laze around
and rarely open up.
Jasmine’s just so overbearing
and I prefer a subtle smell.
Poppy’s bright but only at first sight
and love runs deeper than a glance.
Violet’s also bright in her own light
but her dullness dims my loins.
This is not a sexual poem
but can I spread your petals?
Comment by Nickoftime's Sanity Corner
sounds good to me, but then again I'm not a poet...I am however a hopeless romantic, and I think you've done a pretty good job here...
Well done...I'd send it...
Take care,
Nick
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Comment by Achilliez_Heel
World opinion of the US.
world
The Worlds Problems
From The Heart
WhatEver~
Food~for~Thought
Her~Thoughts
JUL DEL
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